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Teachers are not as important as they used to be because of the choice of other alternatives for students, such as online teaching. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern world, the technology of electronics has been enhanced rapidly. So there are a lot of online classes and they are consumed by many people. Because of
this
 reason, some people say that the role of teachers is not as necessary as they used to be because there are other replacements for students like online lectures.
Hence
, in
this
 essay I will discuss about the above issue and will suggest my view. It is considered that tutors are not necessary anymore because the internet provides more information to much more students.
However
, In my opinion, I think that tutors are still very valuable to students as they used to be.
First reason
Suggestion
The first reason
 of
this
 argument is because they teach not only knowledge but
also
 other important things. They teach the social interaction from their
precious
just preceding something else in time or order
previous
 experiences. They rectify a
misbehavior
improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviour
.
For example
, if a student bothers a classmate and says bad words to someone, they can let
he
that male; objective male pronoun
him
 know that his
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is bad and rectify that.
Also they
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Also, they
 can teach about a manner for good social life of students. But the internet can’t do that. The computer just supports information for students.
Secondly
, teachers can do emotional exchange with students. They talk with their students a lot and give them emotional support during the period of the school’s life.
Therefore when
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Therefore, when
 a student has concerns about something and is disappointed, he can become to be better through talking with teachers. It means that the role of teachers leads to
heathy mind
Suggestion
a healthy mind
healthy mind
healthier mind
heavy mind
 of students. In conclusion, I am a firm believer that the internet classes can’t replace teachers because they can’t share important things beyond knowledge.
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