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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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The 21st
century
 has begun. What changes do you think
this
 new
century
 will bring? Use examples and details in your answer. Man, through the ages, has undergone many changes from the time when he depicted a herd of mammoths on the walls of his cave to these days when he can create beautiful pictures and even make coffee by use of computer technologies without leaving his
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 chair. The 20th
century
 made huge steps in developing computer technologies and reached many goals that made our life much easier. What should we expect in the 21st
century
?
First
 of all, I think that the pace of our life will speed up: we will move faster from one place to another, from one continent to another using high speed jet
airplanes
.
Second
 of all, I believe that we will be able to do many things that take much time now without leaving our house. Computers will be
everywhere including
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everywhere, including
 out clothes. Many people will have chips and mini computers inserted in their heads to hold
huge amount
Suggestion
a huge amount
 of information and have a quick access to it. But what will be the most amazing thing in the 21st
century
 is the flights to the outer space and Mars that will be available to all people. Scientists say that Mars has many things similar to the Earth's.
Moreover
, they say that with the help of modern technology people can artificially create conditions that will allow people to live there on the constant basis. To sum up, I am sure that many amazing changes will be brought by the 21st
century
.
Furthermore
, I think that with the help of the contemporary technologies people can do many things that were even difficult to imagine a
century
 ago. So, nowadays it is rather difficult and even impossible to imagine all changes that will happen in the
next
 decades.
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