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Advantages and Disadvantages of Living in a Big City

#city
Many people agree that living in the
city
 is a great choice while others said that living in a small village is better. In
this
 essay I will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
 and
disavantages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
 of the
city
.
First
, I will mention the advantages. The cities now are very modern. When you live in the
city
 you will receive the latest devices in the world. You will
also
 have a better internet connection when living in the
city
.
Second
, there are many skyscrapers in the
city
. The skyscrapers saves space and it is more convenient. When living in the
city
, you will
also
 have many job opportunities.
For instance
, if you want to be a doctor, you can just go to a hospital and ask for a job there because there are many hospitals in the
city
.
However
, there are disadvantages too.
Firstly
, the high crime rate
make
Suggestion
makes
 the local inhabitants more worried. There are thieves, robbers, kidnappers, and others now are very evil these days.
Secondly
, the
city
 is polluted. The sounds
from
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of
 vehicles, and music concerts are very disruptive. There are
also
 air, water and ground pollution.
Lastly
, traffic jams is are
usual problems
Suggestion
the usual problems
 in the cities since there are lots of people and vehicles, the roads are usually
croweded
overfilled or compacted or concentrated
crowded
. The traffic jam can lead to accidents. Accidents happen when people cross the road and some vehicles came closer by,
then
 they crash together. In my opinion, I prefer living in the
city
 because I was born there. You will just have to be more careful when living in the
city
.
Submitted by Tran Ta on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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