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Some people believe that violence on television an computergames has a damaging effect on the society. What is your opinion?

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In
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 day and age the idea stated above has turned into an immense discussion, with many human beings holding various attitudes toward
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 issue. Personally, I completely agree with the above expressed statement, since worthwhile reasons lie in my viewpoint to support in
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 with, the main reason to consider is rooted in the fact that violence in films and
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 games should be reduced since people copy acts from motives, regardless what they see on the television and they try to do
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 as what they do in
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 games.
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 it is generally considered that violent media accustoms viewer to cruelty. We can see a lot of violent situations in
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 games which have occurred in real life. The
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 explanation which is capable of supporting the point held by me is that display the violent scenes through television or
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 games, interactive to young population as an outcome population may face very big harm,
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 is due to the fact that the main player of
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 games and the main television viewers are
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 part of the population. There are those who argue,
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, that people should get behaviour from their family, the violent scenes do not make an impact to mature people who have the sustainable psychology. Yet, I am unconvinced that everybody in the community has the stable psychology because one should not be neglected which is that young people and people do not have the broad outlook and psychology is not improved for
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 reason they try to relive in real life what they see in the violent scenes. Some movies or
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 games are made for that purpose. In the light of these facts, one can conclude that the violence scenes have the very big harmful effect
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 reason the number of violence should reduce on films and video games.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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