Some people believe that in the near future there will be no borders between countries, while others feel that national borders will always remain. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
The discussion about whether governments are thinking of removing national
borders
with neighbouring countries or whether this
will remain unchangeable forever raises a thorny question in today's complex human beings. Although
it can be argued that some claim borders
will be disappearing in the near future, I strongly believe that it is not possible yet for some special factors.
There are several reasons why many Individuals expect not to see any borders
between communities in a rapidly changing world. The main issue is that we could possibly be at the end
of the globalisation era in which we are living. Today's events bring into the open some visible issues and it is obvious that globalisation, most probably, does not work anymore. For example
, a new plague so-called Coronavirus has spread across the globe and scientists have not yet found any proper vaccine or any solution. Therefore
, we need to change this
era with a new one, which could require us to collaborate, cooperate and learn shared values with each other in order to solve common problems. In this
case, there will be no need for any environs, according to
many.
On the other hand
, I would argue that environs are still utterly essential for societies internationally. The foremost reason is that most of the communities would definitely be in the position of an enemy for some reason. For instance
, there is a huge animosity between Azerbaijan and Armenia, not only between authorities but also
between nations. That is
why, it is not possible to open purview between the public like these, let alone knock down the front lines between them. Another measure could be thought that the state should be at the same level in terms of living costs or other aspects. The prime example is that those who are living under the poverty line will move to other developed regions illegally. And this
is only one example, there will be numerous problems between folks in this
regard. Thus
, we have not yet reached that level where we need no bounds.
To conclude
, in spite of some reasonable arguments for terminating borders
among countries, I am inclined to believe that national borders
will be seen for a long period. It is also
anticipated that many kingdoms from different regions of the world will cooperate with one another, but not eliminate borders
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task response
Your essay addresses both perspectives of the discussion and provides a clear opinion. However, to enhance your task response, you should provide more specific and relevant examples to support your points.
task response
Ensure that your ideas are more clearly and comprehensively developed. Some of your points, while valid, could be elaborated on further to improve clarity and depth.
coherence cohesion
While your essay has a logical structure, it may benefit from clearer transitions between paragraphs and more cohesive links within paragraphs. This will help guide the reader and improve the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, but the conclusion could be more impactful by summarizing the key points discussed in the body paragraphs more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Incorporate more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your main points. This will make your arguments more convincing and comprehensive.
task response
You have successfully discussed both views and provided your own opinion, which is essential for this type of essay.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay is clear with distinct paragraphs for introduction, body points, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarises your opinion, reinforcing the main argument presented in the essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.