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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Museums play a vital role in educating the public about their
history
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 and civilization. The opinion is divided as to whether museums should charge fees for
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. In my opinion, I believe that imposing
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 fees has more benefits than drawbacks.
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, if there are no admission fees imposed, the number of visitors will be increased significantly.
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, the average waiting time will be higher, which could impact their experiences. Having to pay
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 fees could resolve the issue by reducing the number of visitors. The major distinct advantage of
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 approach is that funds can be reinvested to develop the services offered by museums,
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 as hiring more employees and building renovations. Another added benefit is that only customers who are interested in the exhibitions and have knowledge about the
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 of museums will be most likely the one who will be willing to pay the
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 fees, so they will be the most benefited. Of course, those who say that admission fees should be waived to promote the heritage and
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 of the country and to encourage the public to visit their national museums, are quite correct; but it is
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 true,
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, that admission fees do not only support the finance of the museum but
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 help potential visitors to read about their
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 and appreciate their visits.
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, entrance fees could be lowered for senior citizens and teenagers. In conclusion, I would not want to undermine the fact that museums are promoter of our national heritage.
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, by imposing low fees for
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 can enhance the offered services remarkably. I think the advantages of entrance fees far outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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