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Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes in some countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought that overindulging has the same adverse impacts on health’s human as smoking, giving rise to implement advertisements as cigarettes in several nations
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 In my opinion, the former view is well-founded,
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 the latter is rather unreasonable. To commence with, an explanation why eating large amount of unnecessary
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 puts consumers in jeopardy is somewhat related to certain potential health hazards. To be more detailed, while people ingesting excessive
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 intake are susceptible to cardiovascular matters, obesity, and so forth, smokers are in danger of digestive issues, lung cancer, and other illnesses.
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, my cousin devoured significant unhealthy
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 on a regular basis, which acts as a catalyst for suffering detrimental health conditions, especially being overweight.
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, I do not think that forbidding prohibitions will make huge contributions to diminish the consumption of these
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, it is indispensable to understand that the aim is not only to sell goods but
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 to inform regarding price, ingredients, etc.
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, there is increasing number of options for buyers and they can know how well the
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 it is entirely determined by customers themselves. In fact, the percentage of smokers are at an unprecedented rate, regardless of banning all forms of advertisements and providing warnings images in pockets. Eating, smoking or not is entirely determined by them. In conclusion,
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 both overindulging and smoking brings about a wide rage of insidious risks, I opine that it is not essential for government to introduce prohibitions for certain foodstuffs.
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