You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university's notice board. Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and Give your reason for writing Tell about your education Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job. Write at least 150 words.

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Hello Mr. Smith I saw on the university’s board a notice about

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vacant position of

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Assurance Manager. I am writing to tell you that I want to apply for

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position. I think I fit perfectly because of my background.

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with, I would like to describe my education. I’m a fourth-year student at Loren Brusque University. I

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Business Administration. I studied economics, management and production

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. I study time and people management for factories and know well all

quality

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standards.

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, I had an internship at a big manufactory as a

Quality

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Assurance Manager for six months. I planned the work of one department, controlled plans execution on time and participated in a strategy plan to develop our division. I got a positive review from my boss. It follows that I have the relevant experience for your job. You wrote that

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position was for

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. It is very convenient for me

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apply

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because my classes/lectures finish at 1pm and

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I can work. I look forward to hearing from you. If you require any

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information, please do not hesitate to contact me. Regards, Nadezhda Eliseeva.

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To further improve coherence, consider using a consistent method to introduce your paragraphs (e.g., using 'firstly' for the first point and 'secondly' for the second point, and so on).

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Ensure the recipient's name is consistent throughout the letter. You addressed the letter to Mr. Smith but later referred to Mr. Walker; choose one and stick with it.

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Consider adding more specific details about your skills and achievements during your internship to provide a clearer picture of your capabilities.

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The letter clearly states the reason for writing and provides relevant information about your education and work experience.

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The tone of the letter is professional and appropriate for a job application.

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Your paragraphing is clear, with each paragraph covering a distinct point, which aids readability.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

192 words

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