People nowadays leave their countries to study or work abroad. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or a negative development?

Each year, more and more people from all over the world decide to leave their
home
countries and move to another place, because of volume of reasons to travel
such
as studying, working or to settle in. While
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
has a significant impact on the personal
life
and the
home
country
economic
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economies
economically
, it has its disadvantages in losing national
culture
and destroying family bonds. In the following lines, both the positives and negatives of the internet will be thoroughly discussed
To begin
with, the reasons for travelling overseas are quite many: especially when students or workers are holding a strong believe and desire of better
life
quality and safe future. According to Egyptian Central Agency for Public Mobilization and Statistics more than 10 million
Egyptian
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Egyptians
are living abroad, one million for working, many with their families, because of high wages. The
second
reason for moving on is to study abroad and get a higher degree from a better ranking
universities
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university
which enhance their opportunities for better job and
life
quality abroad. At
last
but not least immigration is a dream for the majority, and it is deeply believed immigration the magical key
for
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to
all
life
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life's
problems.
Firstly
, travelling has many advantages for individuals and the society. From an economic view, immigrants and workers transfer a huge amount of money to their families who still living
in
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at
home
.
For example
, Al Ahram newspaper published Egyptians yearly transfer 27 billion dollars to
Egypt which
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Egypt, which
formed more than 50% from Egypt foreign-exchange reserves. For students, studying abroad in a high ranked university means social position in his country and a high quality job with extraordinary
life
.
Nevertheless
, despite the merits previously mentioned, leaving and travelling has its demerits.
This
is because how it
affected
settled securely and unconditionally
effected
on them badly in many ways, they disconnect from their roots and reformed by the new
culture
where they live and it’s very hard to reconnect again.
For example
, parents abroad follow the host country laws and
also
local
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the local culture
culture
to be a part
from
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of
that new society, they raise their
children according
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children, according
to new
culture
which sometimes against their own religions
believes
any cognitive content held as true
beliefs
or original traditions.
Hence
, immigrants around the globe are advised to
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gather
, keep their traditions alive and raise their children on patriotism. Overall, having shown both aspects of travelling
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to
study, work or immigration, it can be concluded it has its merits and demerits. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
is very beneficial as long as they can create the balance between the new
culture
and their
home land
the country where you were born
homeland
culture
.
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