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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country.

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It is widely argued that
tourism
 is becoming a popular sector and it has been encouraged in my countries. Despite the
tourism
 being criticized for its negative effects, I believe that, if sustainable,
tourism
 would bring to a
country
 more advantages than disadvantages. If before
tourism
 was seen as an opportunity for a
country
 to develop and become more wealthy, lately has started to be seen as a threat
for
Suggestion
to
 the
country
 as the modernization that it brings, leads often to loss of traditions and culture.
Tourism
 is often considered a great cause of pollution and depletion of natural habitat. I agree with that, too often government pushed their countries to invest in new infrastructures that had destroyed the ecosystem and the creation of buildings for the hospitality that do not take into consideration the surrounding environment, destroying the integrity of the landscapes. These eco-monsters had ruined many paces letting these countries losing their previous charm.
Nevertheless
,
tourism
 can help a
country
 to reveal its beauty and the
population
 could really benefit from it. In my opinion, the solution is contained in the way
tourism
 is developed.
In other words
, if we encourage a
tourism
 that do not have an impact on the environment,
this
 can be a good source of income for the
population
 without losing anything else. Sustainable
tourism
 could even help to promote awareness regarding the traditions of the
country
 visited, keeping
this
 alive. Green
tourism
 is developed for connecting responsible tourists to the
country
 they are visiting, without negatively impacting the
population
 and using infrastructures that respect precise standards. In conclusion, I think that
tourism
 is a great opportunity to get to know other countries, and if
tourism
 follows certain regulations, it can be of a great help for the
population
 that it will economically benefit from it without impacting into the environment and promoting the respect of the culture and traditions.
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