Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Over the
last
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few decades, technology has been significantly utilized in universities and schools. While some old schools believe that there are several downsides of using
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being one more than one
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more on computers, others feel that traditional education coupling with technology has a vast impact on scholars’ performances. I
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personally agree that we could bring benefits to students via new technology. Supporters of the conventional education argue that there are several health problems associated with overused computer. It is inevitable that there are several things on computer tempting and distracted students from paying attention in learning. They are likely to lose their focus and spend hours to gaming and movies, resulting in health issues. Some students face minor illness
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as myopia,
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eyesores
an eyesore
, and office syndromes, whereas in South Korea, students were playing games 16
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straight and die owing to lacking enough rest. Having said that, accessible
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for all students have impacted teaching quality markedly. With the advent of
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the internet
and computer, students can find every
knowledge
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instantly at no cost. Top universities offer a lot of free online courses for anyone who is interested.
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, I am studying in medical undergrad schools and eager to utilize artificial intelligence to medical applications. I can enjoy studying
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topic from Stanford University free of charge. Perhaps, students can boost their
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productivity
via using computers. In the past, scholars
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spent
hours in
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the library
searching and understanding
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from books. Compared to the past, we can browse any
knowledge
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instantly and select the one suiting us.
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, struggling in understanding textbook and spending hours to figure it out could reduce by videos on online
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platform.
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, students can get the same
knowledge
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in much shorter time. To sum up, accessible knowledges and more productivities from using computers overshadow the downsides.
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