International travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country visited. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

It is sometimes argued that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
abroad has positive influences on not only visitors but
also
host nations. While I agree that there are several drawbacks of international travel, I would argue that these disadvantages are outweighed by
benefits
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the benefits
.
Travelers
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Travellers
Travels
Travelling
and host countries have to face with some problems when international travel becomes more and more popular.
First
,
language barrier
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the language barrier
is one of the most important trouble which most foreign visitors meet.
For instance
, when getting lost,
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
do not enable to ask for directions to come back their hotels because they do not have the ability of understanding and communicating with local individuals.
Furthermore
, travelling between countries contributes to the spread of contagious diseases worldwide, especially airborne disease. Take
coronavirus
disease 2019
for example
. At the beginning, the disease appeared in a metropolitan of China, but due to international movement, at the present, it becomes a severe global pandemic with millions of people infected all over the world.
However
, despite the aforementioned drawbacks, travelling overseas still has outstanding merits.
First
,
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
travelling
travels
can widen their knowledge and gain memorable experiences when exploring new cultures in foreign countries.
For example
, when visiting
to
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in
Vietnam,
tourists especially
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tourists, especially
those come from Western countries have opportunities to learn how to use chopsticks, listen to Vietnamese folk
music including
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music, including
cheo
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Cheo
chi
chaos
” and “
cai
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CAI
luong
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Luong
” and wear traditional costumes
such
as “Ao dai”.
In addition
, an increase in the number of visitors travelling to another country makes contribution to the development of tourism services.
As a result
, it brings
higher level
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a higher level
higher levels
of employment for local residents who are recruited to serve as workers in hotels or restaurants and
thus
help them improve their living standard. In conclusion, while there are some reasons to believe that international travel has some shortcomings, my own view is that the advantages still eclipse these disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchange
  • Exposure
  • Broadens horizons
  • Increases understanding
  • Promotes economic growth
  • Tourism
  • Educational opportunities
  • Personal development
  • Self-confidence
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Disease transmission
  • Economic disparities
  • Cultural misunderstandings
  • Clashes
  • Security risks
  • Safety concerns
  • Balancing
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
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