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most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial to what extent is globalisation of positive or negative development give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#people #world #globalisation #development
There is currently a contentious argument over whether
globalisation
 is beneficial or not. I will examine
this
 topic from both sides and
then
 give my opinion. There are some people who argue that
globalisation
 is beneficial because it enables one to explore the whole word as each and every
country
 is connected because of
globalisation
. Another reason for why I support the notion is that it has opened new boundaries for people by diversifying their areas of interests and choices. An example of
this
 is that development of India is taking place at a very fast rate because of
globalisation
 as India is dealing economically, financially with many countries easily. The reason for which I am against the notion is that it sometimes results in
downfall
Suggestion
the downfall
 of a
country
's economy. Because of
globalisation
, foreign goods, at a cheap rate get easily available to people of any
country
 due to which they do not prefer their own
country
's goods and
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 results in
downfall
Suggestion
the downfall
 of
economy
Suggestion
the economy
. On the whole, it can be said that
globalisation
 is necessary because it opens new areas for
people but
Accept comma addition
people, but
 it has its own negative side as it sometimes results in
decrease development rate
Suggestion
the decrease development rate
a decrease development rate
 of
country
Suggestion
the country
a country
.
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