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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is often argued that tourists from overseas should be charged more than local residents to visit important sites and monuments. While
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 practice might benefit the domestic economy in the short run, I believe an increase in fees for international travellers can do more harm than good in the long run. On the one hand, a number of reasons may justify the fact that an increase in fee is necessary.
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, charging extra
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for
 international residents can benefit the
country
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's economy.
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 is because more money is going to the
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's Gross Domestic Product (GDP) and a rise in GDP is considered beneficial for the economy.
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, the idea of increasing the costs of visiting local attractions may please local people. It is of general consensus that since local people pay tax to the government every year, the fee should be lower for them.
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, a number of disadvantages may occur by adopting
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 policy. If travellers realised that they would have to pay more to visit historical and cultural attractions in a particular nation, they would perhaps decide not to go to that
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 on holiday.
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,
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 can affect not only the income that comes directly from the
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fees, but
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 other tourism-related industries
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 as the airline industry, the hotel industry and so on.
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, a drop in the number of tourists
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 means that there will be a lack of sufficient funding for the maintenance of the local sites and attractions. Should that happen, there will even be fewer reasons for international visitors to want to visit the
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. In conclusion,
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 raising the prices of visiting local attractions and monuments may have short-term benefits, in the long run it can turn out to be counterproductive.
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