Some people think it would be better if the whole family (uncles, aunts and grandparents) are involved in bringing up children rather than only parents. What is your opinion?

Some people take the view that raising children by all members of family is better than parents alone. I strongly believe that negative consequences for both parents and children can stem from
this
method of upbringing.
In
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On
psychological stance
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the psychological stance
, children must be nurtured based on unanimous views. Because various opinions of the whole family on different subjects can make children confused
in
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with
taking united mindset towards life.
Therefore
,
this
might put them in
constant dilemma
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a constant dilemma
of taking right decisions in critical moments of their lives,
such
as making
friend
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friendships
friendship
with appropriate peers.
In addition
, it is generally believed that children instinctively follow approval
opinions
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opinions, although
although
they may not possess a perception of their
decisions’
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decision’s
outcome. Should parents oppose their children, they would highly likely resist against their parents.
This
can trigger stubborn behaviour of children who might never consider their parents. By and large, not only could it be raised wayward children, but it can
also
cast
shadow
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shadows
upon parents’ authority. In sum, albeit some believe that all members of
family
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the family
a family
families
must have
role
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a role
in nurturing children, it is argued that
this
could have disadvantages not only for children, but
also
for their parents. Since children face distinct views in the process of their
nurture
the essential qualities or characteristics by which something is recognized
nature
, they may have difficulty in taking severe actions.
Additionally
, parents; notion may be considered trivial and unimportant to children.
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