Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are two type beliefs about children’s education and
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whether children should be encouraged for sense of
competition
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or they should be taught to cooperate rather than compete. In my opinion, both of them has advantages and disadvantages today and it is going to be explained in
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essay. On
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hand,
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is essential in our times because of a dramatic rise in the population. In crowded societies’ education system,
competition
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or competing children are used to filter which
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is good or bad.
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, in my country there is an exam to decide for people that which university they can go. There has been lots of complaining about that
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education system.
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, in
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crowded environments, there is no other way to choose which
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is accomplished or which
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is
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failing
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, universities wants to chose the best ones for their foundations so the examination based on competitor is the only way to do that.
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, some unique societies have an example of an educational system about teaching children to cooperate and live like co-operated societies.
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, in Finland, there is no
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exams and teachers do not teach children to compete. They just teach them how to learn and how to develop their selves. I believe
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the most civilized way to learn and live. Their population property, location Specialty and economic characteristics give that opportunity.
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, other ordinary and average countries do not have that potential. In conclusion, people think goods and bads both ways of educational properties which are competitive and co-operative. I think children should be taught to co-operate and do things together. But they should
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learn to compete if their environment properties force them to do it.
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, if they do not have another chance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
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