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With the recent improvement to internet , people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services . They have purchased . Is it a good or a bad thing? Discuss both giving your own answer with examples.

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As there is an advancement in internet, nowadays, people buy goods through E-commerce and are given a chance to leave their reviews on the stock they buy. In my opinion, it is a good option for other people who wish to purchase the same work will be benefited by the opinion one leaves. Buying products through online stores is a hectic task since one cannot judge the durability of the product by just merely looking at its images. It is at
this
 point where reviews of the people who had already purchased the goods plays an indispensable role.
For example
, when one wants to buy a dress, the quality of the material and the price of it may not be reasonable and in
such
 situation reviews on the particular dress will be found useful.
Moreover
, the description of the commodity
such
 as colour and size will at time not match and
this
 can
also
 be found out by the views posted by another customer and
hence
 helping people for a hassle free online shopping.
On the other hand
, opinions posted may be incorrect. There are some products which may get damaged during the shipping process. Take for illustrate
this
, a piece of glass dining set have a higher chance of getting broke due to mishandling, and when
this
 profit reach to the customer, at times, they are lured to give a wrong statement about the quality of the commodity or about its packaging.
This
 reflects on other customers who will eventually not purchase them and
thus
 causing a loss to the supplier. But,
such
 inappropriate views are only minimal which does not create much of a hindrance in buying the product. In conclusion, leaving comments and reviews of an item is a good option which has lead to hassle free online shopping.
Although
, some damaging and incorrect views of the product persist, it is very minimal that does not create any obstacle in buying the item.
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