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Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted on the media. To what extent are you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the development of media provides a number of benefits to people. Information around the world have been known by a click on mice or magazine. Beside its advantages, there still exist some bad things which influence directly on people. One of the negative influences is described criminal in detail on magazine and
TV
.
Such
 action should limited to the media, it may help some extent, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree that it is the best solution. In
this
 essay I intend to delve into
this
 problem. The proportion of criminals in the world has been increased annually. News about crimes is updated consecutive everyday. Not surprisingly, there are lots of hot news
aboutcrime
Suggestion
about crime
, breaking the law to feature as front page news, and the same on
TV
. The detailed criminal description could cause obsession for people, especially children who watching
TV
 or reading daily relate to it. Most of population in the world tends to watching
TV
 and reading
newspaper
Suggestion
the newspaper
a newspaper
newspapers
 every day.
As a result
, criminal news could make them uncomfortable than interested.
Furthermore
, children have been strongly affected, in the long run, the foundation of virtuous developed in the wrong direction. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down to saying that it is not healthy to describe criminal in detail. To ensure the safety of audience, government should better handle
this
 problem by enacting some bans to restricted criminal information on
TV
 and tabloid like media.
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