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In recent years many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this positive or negative development?

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Shopping from malls has become an increasingly popular trend among certain demographics of society. These people claim that malls are the main reason for losses or closure of their business.
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 essay will argue why large shopping centres are necessary despite some potential risk to local vendors. Local vendors have always been vary of mass shopping from malls,
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 they are justifiably worried about loosing their enterprise because not only people start avoiding purchase from local shops but
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 they consider it as low status purchasing.
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 a recent published from Oxford University shows that due to large number malls in Dubai, these mini establishment turnovers cut down to 15% as compared to 2018. These few instances bolstered the existing fears in the owner of local shops that increasing number of malls are not necessary and potentially more threatening than the possibility of achieving economies of scale. Despite the minor risk associated with local establishments the idea that the malls are completely unnecessary and threatening is completely preposterous,
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 shopping centres have attracted millions of local customer and tourist over years in countries around the world.
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, the profit of these establishments far outweighs the number of small businesses who have been adversely affected. Overall the idea the malls are unnecessary and dangerous to small vendors are ill informed and threatening in itself and could potentially lead to a far worse outcome for the people at large. To conclude,
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 essay discusses that local owners who are against the large malls have flawed understanding of their economic impact and underestimate the effect of what they believe. In my opinion, constructing large malls is an absolute imperative
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 entirely justified, despite the small risk.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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