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in many countries schools have problem with students behavior. discuss the cause and solution of this menace.

#countries #schools #students #behavior #menace
IN THE PRESENT TIME, OFFSPRINGS ARE MORE INFLUENCED BY THE OLDER'S act.
THIS
 HAVE IMPACT ON THEIR BODY LANGUAGE WHICH SHOWS THEIR act.
FIRSTLY
,
THIS
 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS HOW MINIMUL PARENTAL GUIDANCE AFFECT THE attitude AND
SECONDLY
, HOW ENOUGH TEACHING BY GURDIAN CAN LEAD THEM TO CHANGE THE attitude. THE PRIME CAUSE FOR THE CAUSE OF DEVASTATING attitude IS THE LACK OF PARENTAL SUPPORT THROUGH WHICH THEY FIND THE RIGHT PATH OF LIFE. WHEN, JUVENILES REQUIRE TO HAVE GURARDIAN DURING THE CHILDHOOD life, PARENTS USED TO BUSY IN MAKING GLASMOROUS CAREER.
THIS
 ACTION OF THE PASRENTS MAKE THEM IRRITATED AND UNKNOWINGLY THEY START BEHAVING WEIRD THAN USUAL.
AS A RESULT
, TEACHERS IN THE EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTE FIND DIFFICULT TO MANAGE THEIR NEGATIVE CONDUCT.
FOR INSTANCE
, AS PER THE USA YOUTH STUDY, 60% OF THE STUDENTS DURING THE SCHOOL life ARE NAUGHTY THAT MAKE HARD FOR MENTORS TO CREATE DISIPLINE AMONG THE LEARNERS.
IN CONTRAST
, THE BEST WAY OF OVER COMING TO
THIS
 ISSUE IS PROVIDING INFORMATION TO THE GUARDIANS ABOUT THE CONSEQUENCES OF NOT ALLOTING QUALITY TIME FOR THE JUVENILES. WHEN PARNETS OBTAIN
THIS
 PRECIOUS INFORMATION THEY KOW THE WORTH OF TIME THAT HELP THE LEARNERS DURING THE SCHOOLING PERIOD. CONSEQUNTLY, BEHAVIOR WOULD CHANGED AND MAKE THE RESPECTABLE STUDENT AMONG THE MENTORS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, AUSTRALIAN EDUCATIONL REPORT SURVEY REVEALED THAT 70% OF THE STUDENTS ARE MOE RESPECTABLE AND INTTELIGENT BECAUSE OF THE PROPER TEACHING PROVOIDED BY THEIR PARENTS. IN CONLUSION, CHILDREN INDEED VERY FLEXIBLE THAT ANY ONE CAN INFLUENCE THEM.
HOWEVER
, TEACHER AND GUARDIANS BOTH ARE RESPONSIBLE FOR THEIR BEHAVIOR DURING THE SCHOOLING PERIOD AND LATER IN LIFE AS WELL.
THIS
 ONLY COULD BE ACHIVED, WHEN BOTH WORK AS A TEAM WITH ALL HARD WORK.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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