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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear sir, I am writing
this
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 letter with regard to change in my work location from current to head office for six months.
To begin
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 with, my name is Parthkumar Parmar and I have been working for
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last
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 two years as a team leader in your organization.
Moreover
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, I would like to join our head office for
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 certain period of time to gain valuable experience and skills.
Apart from
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,my role in the current branch will be
covred
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covered
 by one of my friends,who
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 expertise in our areas.Even though,I am always available for any assistance during
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 period. I will send his resume
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 your
emial
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 address,so it is up to you to hire him or someone else.
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,I am requesting you to make the arrangements for the six months,so I can add valuable experience
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 my resume.
After
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 period, I will join my regular branch without any break. Please let me know if you require any
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 information. Yours sincerely, Parthkumar Parmar

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coherence cohesion
To improve your coherence and cohesion, try to use clearer topic sentences and ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs. This will help in maintaining a single idea per paragraph and improve logical structure.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or justifications to strengthen your task response. This will help convey your reasons more convincingly and showcase a more complete response.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed each part of the task, clearly explaining your purpose, how your work will be managed, and requesting assistance.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for a professional setting, which is suitable for writing to a manager.
coherence cohesion
You used a clear greeting and closing, which adds to the overall structure of your letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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