The use of personal cars has increased more than ever before but this use of cars causes many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce these problems, should we discourage people from using cars?

The usage of personal vehicles has been rapidly increasing. Nowadays people prefer to travel with their own
cars
instead
of public
transport
.
This
trend does more bad than good. In
this
essay, I will review
this
attitude and discuss its pros and cons. On the one hand,
this
attitude has some benefits but
on the other
hand
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it has major disadvantages. Beginning with its few advantages: First of all, using your own car is probably more comfortable than sitting
in
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a bus with 30 strangers. If not more. Sometimes you can not even find a place to sit and you have to stand the whole way because of the crowd, especially at peak hours.
Secondly
,
traveling
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with your own vehicle might be more
cost effective
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than public
transport
depending on the
traveler's
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situation.
For instance
, here in the Netherlands students have a free card by which they can use public
transport
for free. Ordinary people,
on the other hand
, do think that public
transport
is too expensive and
that is
one of the reasons why they choose to travel
with
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their own car.
Thirdly
, it is faster and it saves
time
.
Instead
of spending 40
minutes
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you spend 20 minutes. Those were some advantages. Now it is
time
to review the disadvantages of using our own vehicles.
Firstly
, It causes damage to the environment. The more
cars
we use, the more pollution we get.
Co2
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coming out of those vehicles affects the atmosphere
and
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elevates global warming and makes it a bigger issue than what it already is. Second of all, using
cars
leads to more traffic
james
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jams
. Streets will be more crowded and that may cause frustration and delay.
Thirdly
, it is inconsistent, one day you will get on
time
the other day you may face traffic jams meanwhile public
transport
barely delays and always comes on
time
.
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as I mentioned earlier it is more cost effective. As a conclusion, using our
cars
is comfortable but we have to be aware of its dangers and how it affects and harms our environment. Everyone should be responsible for
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. the place where we and our kids . be wise and take care of our beautiful planet.
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