Despite huge improvements in healthcare, the overall standard of physical health in many developed countries is now falling. What could be the reason for this trend, and what can be done to reverse it?

Even though healthcare of advanced countries has been greatly improved, people’s physical
health
condition has been rather exacerbated. Increasingly more populations in those countries have been suffering from
health
problems
such
as obesity, diabetes, hypertension, cardiovascular diseases and much more. Some of the problems will be discussed in detail below, which is being followed by
suggested
Suggestion
suggesting
solutions. The major causes of poor
health
in developed countries are
lifestyle
and diet. Most people
have sedentary
Suggestion
have a sedentary lifestyle
lifestyle
; they tend to work in offices where little physical activity is required; they travel by car rather than walking; they relax
in
Suggestion
on
the couch by watching television
instead
of doing outdoor activities. Meanwhile, many people nowadays have irregular meal times and consume excess
food
, which oppresses the stomach and leads to digestion problems. At the same time, due to
busy
Suggestion
busy lifestyles
a busy lifestyle
lifestyle
, they usually choose to eat fast
food
or pre-prepared meal which contains high calories and imbalanced nutrition.
As a result
of it, populations in those countries are becoming overweight. Regular exercise and healthy diet are the key to elevating the overall standard of
health
in
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
countries. The population, especially suffering from
lifestyle
diseases, is advised to work out on a regular basis. Schools should open more courses associated with physical activities to ensure
physical
Suggestion
physical health conditions
the physical health condition
health
condition of their students. Governments can help the situation by equipping more sports facilities in every community to promote the public to be involved in physical exercises. With regard to the need for
healthy diet
Suggestion
a healthy diet
, each individual should put an effort/ to have regular meal times and carefully select well-balanced
food
. Schools should introduce healthy options and eliminate junk
food
from the menu, and educate their students to have a good eating habit. Governments can
also
play their role
by
Suggestion
in
regulating and restricting
food
industry/ not to use
excessive amount
Suggestion
excessive amounts
an excessive amount
of sugar, fat and sodium. According to the factors outlined above, one can conclude that the overall standard of physical
health
in
developed
Suggestion
developing
countries will only improve when people become more physically active and start to eat in a healthier way.
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