you have recently started work in new company.Write a letter to an english speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed job tell him news other.

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Dear James, I hope that you and your family

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in good health. I am writing

this

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letter to express my cherish for my new position as a

bookeeper

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bookkeeper

in Alpine company. Definitely, I know you will be on cloud nine after hearing about my new career update. At

first

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, I was frightened to abandon my previous employment.

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all credit goes to my husband who instigated me to pursue my career in my

choosen

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chosen

field. Indeed, it really feels delighted to be part of the work that I really

apprecaite

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appreciate

and aspire.

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, three employees work under me it is so experiencing moment to delegate the duties to others.

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, you know in the past job my boss was so cranky and make me

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work under my juniors.

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, I have organised the party for my new journey. I wish you to be part of

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jouney

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journey

alongside

with

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me. As we were always

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a partner

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partner

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in crime for a long time. Another thing, I

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want to show my son to you he is almost 4

year

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old now. I will eagerly

waiting

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for you. yours lovingly,

sarab

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Sarah

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

191 words

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