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Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Media
such
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 as newspapers should not be allowed to publish the personal lifestyle of political people.
This
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 essay agrees with that statement because these mediums can divert their mindset and make them to be more focused towards their private life, and these representatives
too
in the direction of
to
 have privacy which they want to enjoy with their loved ones. Print media should not be allowed to publish the private details of a political person because they may get diverted from their actual goal. Politicians’ primary role is to work for the betterment of the society. If the newspaper editors are allowed to write on the lifestyle of ministers,
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 might affect the overall development of a nation as they have
responsibility
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a responsibility
the responsibility
 to make county grow.
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, in 2015, in India, an editor of famous newspaper ‘The Tribune’ once published the life of famous minister Mr. Amit Shah after which he had spent over 1 lakh rupees on his outfit from the money given to him for the people he had given responsibilities. Another reason why private details of ministers should be banned in newspapers is that they
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 have personal lives which they want to enjoy with their family. Sharing their life may create disturbances and distancing among family members. Paparazzi should take it as moral responsibility and allow them to live like a normal person.
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, in China, more than 65% of divorce cases among politicians are because their lives being shared
by
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with
 reporters of newspapers. In conclusion, it should be the duty of the newspaper reporters not to publish the particulars of politicians because it makes them
to work
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work
 more responsibly
for
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in
 the country and allows them to live more happily by enjoying their time with families as well.
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