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Teenagers and young people should share housework equally with their parents. Do you agree?

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Nowaday
Suggestion
Nowadays
, many people argue that daily duties should be equally shared by parents and their children. I
absolutly
completely and without qualification; used informally as intensifiers
absolutely
 agree with
such
 a point a view and I believe that it is
marvelous
extraordinarily good or great; used especially as an intensifier
marvellous
 to do things as a family.
Typically young
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Typically, young
 people have more free
time despite
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time, despite
 the fact that they have been
study
Suggestion
studied
 at
scool
an educational institution
school
 for hours and they have too much
home work
preparatory school work done outside school (especially at home)
homework
 to do. Meanwhile, the adults Come home late after their work and they need some rest. If everyone in the family fulfil their duties, all family members will have more free time.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 will be less exhausted and more satisfied.
Undoutedly
Suggestion
Undoubtedly
 parents do household better by
comporison
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
 with their children.
Moreover
, they have an
oppoturnity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
 to give the adolescent
usuful
being of use or service
useful
 knowledges.
Furthemore
in addition
Furthermore
 chores performing can see as a way of getting ready for
adults
Suggestion
adult
adult's
 life.
Finally some
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Finally, some
 people argue that children should do their occupation after
scool
an educational institution
school
sale
schools
. But they can combine household and hobbies.
For example
, they can perform choices while there are listening to the music or dancing. In conclusion, I believe that all family should do household equally. In
this
 way people will be pleased and
thus
 they will enjoy the time spending together.
Submitted by Ruzana Meretukova on

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