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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often discussed weather
history
 is useless, or it can be a guideline for the present.
This
 essay will discuss both views, giving relevant examples and
then
 I will give my opinion. On the one hand,
along
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a long
history
,
it
it is
it's
 possible to observe how people have made the same mistakes over and over. In other words, even though many decisions throughout human
history
 led to terrible consequences, like wars, no matter how much pain
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 caused, the same choices have been repeated many times. Just to give an example,
First
 World War had a disastrous impact on many countries and thousands of lives were taken.
Nonetheless
, a few years later, a
second
 war was started, being even harder. So, it really seems that humans never learn from their actions.
On the contrary
, it is
also
 evident that
history
 can help people not to forget their past actions, in order to avoid the same mistakes. In fact, all the records kept the museums, and even some celebrations, are a way to connect the past with the
present
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Present
,
Accept space
,
and change the future for the better. As an example, in order to remember all the pain that fascist regime brought, and the millions of
Jewish
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Jews
 who were victims of it, the museum of the holocaust has been built in Berlin.
This
, with many other
,
Accept space
,
 is a
symbols
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symbol
 against fascism, and today acts or words that support flag are against
law
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the law
. To sum up, it is not always clear if mankind can learn from
history
, but certainly,
being
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Being
 aware of the past, some mistakes can be avoided.
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