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In some societies the number of crime comitted by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extend do you agree?

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A globally distributed apprehension which is the teenagers should receive adult
punishment
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 for their major
crime
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 surrounded by various tenets of different individuals from whichever side for an extended duration. And perhaps owning to my progressive horizon, I partially agree with the above expressed statement. In a great deal of circumstances, one prominent factor which is appreciably induces per head to be with consonant viewpoint about to give adult
punishment
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 to teenagers regardless of age is directly connected to it and
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 initial fact is that young people
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 feel responsible for their actions
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 of
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. Additional paragraph with an equal supportive point to the above given idea
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 pretty usual amongst human beings regarding
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 issue is for
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 reason they commit
crime
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 freely. And
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 is fundamentally rooted in that most part of governments do not give very big punish to teenagers. Alternatively, partial disagreement
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 founded in the profoundness of my soul is that teenagers do not have an improved outlook
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 they cannot image how can conclude their
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. For
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 reason, more countries do not give the heavy type of punishing to teenagers.
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, even the negative idea has its own reverse aspect which is that other teenagers see punished pier and get conclusion for them and they try not repeat
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crime
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the crime
. On balance, in spite of a few negative facts in the face of that
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 punish teenagers get a very big psychological attack, I tend to believe that teenagers face with responsible through
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