Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that the teenagers should contribute to help the community with unpaid

work

, since it would be benefit both. It is a very common thought that

this

type of contribute could help to educate the teenagers.

However

, I strongly disagree with

this

point of view, as I believe that each job should be paid and free

time

is an important resource for the teenagers.

Firstly

of all, a person who works has the right to be paid for their

time

This

is because the economic situation is not so good for several families and most of them has already started to

work

to help their family,

such

as pay the bills, pay the rent or the books to study.

For example

, I have started to

work

at the age of 16 years old to buy my scholarly books and help my family with other expenses. Without a job it would be impossible for me to attend the school.

Secondly

, almost all teenagers attend the school.

In other words

this

means that grand part of their

time

is dedicated to the study and their free

time

is an important part to improve their mental health and reduce the stress.

For instance

, many doctors think the sports as whole help the students to increase the concentration. To sum up, I think the

work

is an optimal instrument to help our teenagers to understand how works the life and to help them to realize their dreams.

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2Word repetition
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0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

246 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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