Tourism is encouraged in many countries .Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country.

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contemporary era

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the contemporary era

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a lot of nations rely on tourism as it

become

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becomes

a source of capital

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so every nation has hearten it

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it is

advanteous

giving an advantage

advantageous

adventurous

for manifold

reasonsThough

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its demerits can not be overlooked

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refers to the speaker or writer

concerned

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refers to the speaker or writer

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that

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is certainly advantageous

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despite a few inevitable downsides. There are multifarious perquisites of tourism

for

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a country.

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and foremost is it uplift the economic structures

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To be elaborated

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for visiting

reowned

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destinations sightseers must have to lay out

staggering amount

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a staggering amount

of money to afford entry tickets which

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boost up national as well as local earnings

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Secondly

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it provides innumerable

recuitment

the act of getting recruits; enlisting people for the army (or for a job or a cause etc.)

recruitment

opportunities

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for

provincial community

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To cite an example

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jaipur

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Jaipur

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the largest city of of Rajasthan state in

india

a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947

India

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also

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know as

pink city

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the pink city

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as it is popular among people all over the world for manifold monuments and destinations

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namely Amer fort

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Jantar Mantar

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Hawa Mahaland other mind blowing buildings

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there are multitude guides for guiding visitors about the history of

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places

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Moreover

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also lead

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also leads

to construction of motels

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barsand

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bars and

restraunts

a building where people go to eat

restaurants

to offer each and every facility to trippers.

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all these factors hike collections and provide engagement to local masses.

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represent

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represents

the culture and traditions of a nation

alround

in the area or vicinity

around

the globe as

enormouus

extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree

enormous

arrived from varied corners of the earth.

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as every coin has two faces

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likewise

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if there are pros

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no doubt cons

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there

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prime

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drawback is that it destruct and pollute the

enviornment

the totality of surrounding conditions

environment

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When visitors

enterd

to come or go into

entered

enter

interred

such

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monuments along with foodstuff and other

eatbles

suitable for use as food

eatables

tables

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after utilizing all those they

thriw

propel through the air

throw

empty water bottles and wrappers on the floor

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which contaminate the atmosphere.Even

overfllowing

covered with water

overflowing

of trippers on these

sights

the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)

sites

also

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harm the monuments and it might vanish the records and stories of the

cuture

a particular society at a particular time and place

culture

from the walls of

building

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buildings

the building

a building

whuch

interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class

which

were

architectured

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the architecture

architecture

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ancient time period

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the ancient time period

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Finally, it

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also lead

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also leads

illegall

prohibited by law or by official or accepted rules

illegal

activities like robberies

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as there are manifold expensive statues and jewellery

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populance

people in general considered as a whole

populace

get allured and do

such

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activies

any specific behavior

activities

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refers to the speaker or writer

pen down by saying that

altough

even though, in spite of the fact that

although

there are

kean

having or demonstrating ability to recognize or draw fine distinctions

keen

hinderance

something immaterial that interferes with or delays action or progress

hindrance

of tourism like destruction and contamination

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yet strong points overweigh the

darksides

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dark sides

as it uplift national and local financial gain

abd

in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go

and

also

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introduce disparate people to

ones

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one

one's

nation

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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368 words

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