Some believe that punishment is the only purpose of prisons, while others believe that prisons exist for various reasons. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that penalty is the only purpose of prisons. That
prisoners
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prisoner
should be punished to the extent that they deserve by law. But
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
part of people think that prisons exist for various reasons.
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essay will discuss both points of view. Obviously, people who have committed a crime must be punished by law. They
are should
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should
understand that if they commit a crime
again they
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again, they
will be punished. The
state
the federal department in the United States that sets and maintains foreign policies
State
punishes to prevent the same crimes in the future. But as statistics show, after serving a sentence in prison, people in 40% commit crimes again.
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, prisons exist for various reasons. The state specially from ancient times created special places of imprisonment for killers, of rapists, of maniacs. These people interfere with the stable functioning of society. Criminals are placed in one environment so that they realize that they have made a mistake and must start a new life. Prison is the place where a person’s correction takes place. Where does a person repent. Some convicts corrected learn a new craft begin to believe in God. Well, it is a chance to build a new life. And most importantly, prisoners can communicate with family and friends.
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means that they did not lose social ties even after serving their sentences. To sum up, I think that purpose of prison is not only penalty, it is a rectification, crime prevention, keep necessary social networking and so on.
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