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In some countries, celebrities earn more salary than senior politicians Why? Give your opinion Is that positive or negative

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It has been proven that celebrities and politicians are the highest paid earners in the world. Some people believe that celebrities are eligible to earn high wages while others believe that senior politicians are right persons to earn a good salary. In the following essay, I intend to discuss positive and negative for
this
 and put my personal view. Entertainment is increasing in rapid growth. Due to high demand for celebrities, they are being paid with a hefty amount for acting in the movies or shows which I believe worth. Certain actors and actress have the highest demand in the market because of their hard work and dedication towards acting, which leads to pay huge remuneration and market demand is playing a key factor in paying the amount.
For example
, Some actors who have wealthy money they are willing to encourage poor people like educating kids and adopting villages to improve their living standards.
As a result
, poor people get a good education, which helps country prosperous.
In addition
, by watching favourite actors, some people are fascinated to see their favourite actor and actress on screen and they get more joy by seeing them.
This
 will definitely a boon not a bane for the majority of the audience. . Tv shows are a major source of entertainment for many adults and kids. On the other side, there are some drawbacks of paying huge amount for actors and actresses. Government has to take control of cinema industry so that they can play a crucial role in allocating the salaries for celebrities.
if
Suggestion
If
 no limit is set for their salaries, it will impact the economy and eligible people will suffer from less earnings.
For example
, when the show is started, they allocate 70% of money for main leading characters where as other actors in the film get low salaries. In conclusion, I pen down saying that there are both pros and cons of earning more salary by celebrities than politicians.
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