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Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#country #language
Nowadays, everything is a changing rapidly and come people cannot really find a way to deal with it. Because of that, some of them accidentally moved to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
 which they didn’t know everything. Living in a new
country
 is quite tough with the one who learning abroad, so it’s maybe even harder with the one don’t know every about the
country
 they are living. They don’t understand what people are talking about and they can’t engage in confabulations. If the foreigner can’t understand them, they maybe will be the homeless due to the misunderstanding.
For instance
, my dad’s friend had to work in Africa because of his circumstance. He had to spend massive times to buy something and had to sleep
in
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on
 the pavement because he couldn’t talk to them. In my view, it can cause
big impact
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a big impact
 to our
life but
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life, but
 just at the earlier time, they might have to work really tough, eat some leftovers and sleep in dirty and cold condition.
However
, when they try their best to learn and adjust to their society, there won’t be serious
peoblems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
. They will learn massive and essential things for the individual’s improvement. It will help them to have a lot of experiences to lift their life up.
For example
, our
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
, former prime
minister Ho
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minister, Ho
 Chi Minh, he travelled to many countries in
20th century
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the 20th century
. He travelled with no money and got no information about that destination.
However
, because of his will and his bold, he collected many experiences and
then
 back to our
country
 to lead our
country
 to the
penomenal
of or relating to a phenomenon
phenomenal
 victory against the powerful American soldiers at that time. In my conclusion, everyone has their own
problems but
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problems, but
 the
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 of it always depends on you.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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