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Nowadays, there is trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it iss harmfull to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, the idea stated above has turned into an immense discussion, with many human beings holding various attitudes
toward thisthis
Suggestion
toward this
toward this this
 issue. Personally, I completely agree with the above expressed statement since worthwhile reason lie in my viewpoints to support in
this
 contextual essay.
To begin
 with, the main reason to consider is rooted in the fact that many individuals who watch tv knows the only bad aspect of a problem since they always suffer because they aren’t aware about good sides. The
further
 explanation which is capable of supporting the point held by me is that children who watch tv channel they can see bad
information
 which based on age
this
 is due to the fact teenagers who are our future from young years watches worst
information
 they are becoming vary egoistic because nowadays in every program they shows to us only bad
information
, if they would show many funny, interesting and
also
 good data our young generation aren’t becoming lazy and insane There are those who argue,
on the other hand
, that we have many people who are very snitch they always give wrong data that’s why many program corporations show wrong
information
. Yet I am unconvinced that we should show many documentary films to our children to use their power, outlook and
also
 their interests we should attract
to
being one more than one
two
 good ways. In the light of these facts, one can conclude that programmers companies should continue their films.
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