Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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People often say that “human beings cannot survive four days without water or cannot go for more than three weeks without food”. These days, it seems to be easily transformed into “human beings cannot live within four minutes without their smartphones”. We are living in an era when there is little doubt that modern technology has revolutionized our daily lives and
work
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. One of the greatest innovations that contributes to that usefulness is the
smartphone
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, a gadget which had been facilitating people for a long time. There is likely a number of reasons pertaining to
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imminent issue, tracing the roots of the scenario that people are overusing their smartphones directs us to the fact that
mobile phone
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the mobile phone
has become a must-have device for so many people in the world. Owing to the requirement to regularly be online for their
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or
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, these days, obtaining an effective
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using for
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and
study
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will be a privilege for many people. A pertinent example in point would be during the pandemic caused by Coronavirus in 2020, there is no denying that people have
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an obligation
the obligation
obligations
to stick to their
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or other technological devices to have their
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done at home.
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tends to be more preferred on account of its portable feature and easy-to-use functions. Another plausible reason should
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be responsible is, gradually,
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has replaced almost every other entertaining device and become the most considerably effective technological innovation for entertainment purposes. Evidence for
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statement would be the fact that currently, there are mainly very few of radios or music players selling in the market compared to the past.
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, the developers for
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smartphone operation system
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the smartphone operation system
have put lots of efforts to bring so many applications not only for listening to music, watching
movies but
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movies, but
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for
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new things
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as playing instruments or cooking on the
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. Despite the convenience that
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brought to our society, in my opinion, the persistence of overusing
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kind of technological development has rendered immense negative consequences and foremost of which is the disruption it creates during people’s daily
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. Incidentally, beside those wonderful apps for working,
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; those apps serving entertainment purposes seem to be addicted to many people. In the main, I believe more than a handful of people experienced the time that they
endeavored
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavoured
to rest for five minutes on their
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during their works and it turned out to be two hours or more.
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, irreparable worry had been brought about by spending time on
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too much owing to the fact it affected harmfully on our health condition. One of those is the short-sighted disease which occurs in so many adolescents these days because they constantly look at the screen of
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smartphone
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a smartphone
smart phone
. What is more, scientific research suggests that human who do not
exposure
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expose
to
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for so many hours per day tend to have a more robust constitution that the one who does. It is probably due to the erroneous conception of some people who think using
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to surf the internet is relaxed;
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, from my own knowledge, the tasks people do on
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smartphone
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a smartphone
the smartphone
for entertaining are
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arduous activities for their brains cause it requires brains to assess a multitude of information.
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weighing all the aforementioned, it is undeniable that there are many appropriate reasons for
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to become one of
greatest inventions
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the greatest inventions
of human beings which help us enormously in
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society.
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, abusing
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can be safely stated that it is a social concern that could not be trivialized and need to be alleviated before
its
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it
damages go any
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in today’s society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • digital addiction
  • instant gratification
  • multifunctional
  • connectivity
  • social networking
  • online services
  • self-expression
  • entertainment options
  • instant access
  • educational resources
  • communication tools
  • virtual interactions
  • distracted living
  • technological dependence
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