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Does borrowing money harm friendship? Do you agree or disagree?

#money #harm #friendship
The
first
 thought that comes to us when we are in a difficult period is to ask someone to help.
This
 someone is generally a relative or a buddy. All we have a friend who we can ask, but when the complication is the Money? It is increasingly common that borrowing help harm friendship.
However
, I strongly agree with
this
 point of view, thought I believe that it could be the
last
 resource to resolve the issue.
First
 of all, each of us has a family and the our parents must be the
first
 to know. Our parents would do anything to help us and the cash problem is one of those. It will never matter how long it takes you to return the cash and how you will spend them. If you borrow money from a friend, you need to pay attention how you spend them.
For example
, I had a friend who always asked anyone fund to buy cigarettes, drinks or other things. He never returned the money and many of your friends have stopped going out with him.
Secondly
, borrowing them should be the
last
 resource. Almost all financial problems are given by a bad management, many of us don't usually build an emergency pot. An emergency pot could be the right solution to grand part of the problem.
For instance
, if you had
last
no longer in your possession or control; unable to be found or recovered
lost
 the job you can take those monies to pay bills
such
 as rent house, car insurance ECC. In conclusion, hello baby sun.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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