You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, •explain why you changed jobs •describe your new job •tell him / her your other news

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Hi Sam, I hope my letter will find you in good health. The reason why I'm writing is to share good changes in my professional life. Probably, you remember that I was looking for a job opportunity at Apple, one of the most remarkable companies in the globe.

To begin

with, I was delighted with the previous enterprise.

However

, I couldn't be promoted to a new role. Even though, I showed good results in the sales area. Unfortunately, as I don't speak Chinese they hired someone else

instead

of giving me the opportunity.

Then

, I applied for a job through the website and they hired me two weeks ago as a sales manager in Europe.

This

role is more focused on exports to Europe. Basically, I have to sell all the new devices to the oldest continent as I speak three languages including Spanish, English and Italian.

Also

, I need to track all the sales and discounts.

Furthermore

, I will travel many times to check the shops and have a chat with the operational managers. Apart from that, my husband bought a new farm and village on the outskirts and we feel so lucky that the central bank supported us with a loan. Those accomodations have all the main mod-cons, so you'll feel warm and happy in there. I hope to catch you soon as you're more welcome to visit any time. Let us know when you can stay with us. Please text me as soon as possible so we can discuss the nuances. I look forward to your reply. Best wishes, Claudia

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coherence cohesion

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greeting and closing

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

263 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, •explain why you changed jobs •describe your new job •tell him / her your other news

Word Count

Some people feel that equality between the genders has already been achieved while others feel there is considerable progress to be made. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are increasingly taking place online nowadays. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?