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Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages.?

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Nowadays, many students taking the
gap
 of one
year
 to start the
university
 after completing the school.
However
,
this
 opportunity is not bringing advantages.
In addition
, taking the
gap
 of one
year
 between school and
university
 could cause of squander a
year
 of education.
Therefore
, by these decisions
also
 parents are surfing from pressure and stress. To illustrate, the space of one
year
 between study
also
 can cause that students start to forget the things that they had studied and it could be they have no more interested in education.
On the other hand
, some student thing if they are taking the
gap
 between education,
then
 easily they can find part-time jobs and joining
university
Suggestion
the university
 on another
year
 can take a lot of advantages to them.
Moreover
, students started to collect the money for paying the
university
 fees and
also
 to support their families. To conclude, the
gap
 between school and
university
 should cause disadvantages, but mostly students taking the
gap
 in earning money, but there are
also
 few students who would like to relax from the study.
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