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Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people opine that in order to gain
information
 about a foreign land, it is necessary to
travel
. Others refute
this
 idea and I agree with them. In my opinion, it is possible to gather
information
 without travelling. Having said that, there are some other advantages to travelling. While in my opinion one does not have to
travel
 to find
information
 about other countries, travelling certainly has some other benefits. To start with, it enables us to immerse ourselves in the culture of the country. On TV and the internet we can watch how foreigners celebrate their festivals, but if we
travel
 to those countries we will
also
 get an opportunity to celebrate those festivals with the locals. The experiences are totally different.
Likewise
, when we
travel
 they can taste foreign cuisine. Travelling
also
 gives us opportunities to improve our communication skills.
On the other hand
,
information
 about other countries can be obtained without travelling through online sources
such
 as the internet, TV and mobile phones.
Information
 technology has provided us numerous tools to access the internet and these tools deliver everything we want to learn / discover about other nations. Earlier we had little
information
 about foreign lands, their people and their culture, but now it is even possible to make friends with them without having to leave our country. People can even earn foreign degrees from their home by joining the online courses of international universities.
Thus
, nowadays, there are numerous opportunities to acquire knowledge and
information
 without travelling. To sum up, there is no need to
travel
 to find
information
 about other countries.
However
, travelling to foreign countries allows us to enjoy ourselves, taste exotic cuisines and participate in festivals we have only heard of.
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