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People no longer use newspapers and television because the internet plays the same role. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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These days, people use
internet
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 more than before and they don’t read newspapers and watch television a lot because everything is
in
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on
this
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 information
superhighway
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 and we can do all of our work there.
For instance
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, we can access news, movies, and everything we did before with newspapers and television. There are many advantages for using
internet
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. Almost most of our tasks can be done using world wide web.
we
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We
 can do Shopping, pay bills, connect with others and so on. So using it makes our life comfortable.
On the other hand
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, there are many disadvantages;
for instance
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, when we can do anything with
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internet
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the internet
, we will be lazy and less active. I think it's good to utilize the
Internet
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 as long as it's not too extreme. We should not be dependent on the
Internet
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 and we should try to use television and newspapers sometimes.
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, using the
internet
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 is reasonable, but we must not allow ourselves to be distracted by other means of communication.
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