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Nowadays people buy a lot of unnecessary manufactured products. Is this a positive or negative development? What is the effect of this on the individual and on society?

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For a significant number of people in the modern world, the purpose of existence seems to be to make money in order to buy things that will supposedly make their lives better. While some manufactured goods certainly make life easier, unchecked consumerism has many negative effects on the lives of individuals and the health of society. It is undeniable that some products have made human life dramatically better. The fact that clothes can now be washed and dried at the press of a button rather than being a hard physical process that took many hours is a good example of
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, the problem with many products is that they can make life more complicated. People are always checking their smart phones or looking for the
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 thing that they can buy to make them happy.
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 version of a smartphone even though their old one is still perfectly okay. After a few days they barely even notice that they have something new and exciting.
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, it is clear that manufactured items can have a negative effect on individuals.
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 of people finding satisfaction in creating things or helping others, they merely get brief pleasure from buying something,
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 buying something else over and over again, like a drug addict, without noticing all the amazing things in the world around them.
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, rampant consumerism has harmful effects on society. The production of goods often has extremely negative environmental effects as many high-tech products require the mining of precious minerals or the use of toxic chemicals that are often dumped into waterways at the end of the manufacturing process. Overall, the ability to buy mass-produced goods has made many aspects of our lives more convenient.
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, everyone must pay attention to the consequences of buying things that are not really necessary and may be dangerous.
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