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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People have different views about whether watching movies on phones or tablets and there is no reason to go to the
cinema
. While some people believe that to get the full enjoyment, you have to see it in a
cinema
. In my opinion, watching films and movies at home using my tablet or laptop is more fun than going to the
cinema
. On the one hand, some people think that watching movies on their mobiles or tablets is better than going to the
cinema
 and I agree with them. In order to
watching
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watch
 films on
tablets
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the tablets
 is more comfortable because we can decide how we should sit or what we should wear while watching it.
For instance
, the some people prefer to watch films while they relax on beds.
Furthermore
, seeing films on smartphone is considerably reasonable rather than cinemas. For going
cinema
, you should pay to commute, ticket and some affordable snacks
from
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for
cinema
’s buffet.
However
, watching films on phones should only pay to download them, which is reasonable price.
On the other hand
, for completely enjoying a film you should go
cinema
 because having high technology, which offer numerous visual and sound effects, which cannot show by cell phones and tablets. The results people more engaged and connected to the movie and feel more
thrill and
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thrill, and
 virtual than watching it at home with a tiny screen.
Furthermore
, in cinemas people can watch films without any disruption and interruption than watching it at home. By way of conclusion, while some people think that watching movies in cinemas certainly the best option to get the full enjoyment.
However
, in my opinion, watching films on a smartphone is a cheaper, easier and suitable for most people.
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