Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.

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Many people consider that we owe a variety of opportunities in modern days, which is enlarging, ranging from our domestic

life

to academic topics. There is no doubt and I totally believe that humans live a time which incomparable to past. Numerous options stem from internet, economy and globalization.

First

of all, globalization can highlighted, impacts almost on all aspects of our

life

. Travelling where we wish, learning different skills and even settle in any point of the world is surely advantages, coming from

this

new trend. By marked contrast and to be clear, in the past not even live in a foreign country, but

also

visiting over a long mile away was a real problem because of a country permission, transportation.

This

has already solved by the global world. National discrepancies, language barriers and like are not mattered in the terms of art, study, music.

Secondly

, some are aware of the power of information technologies ease our private and work

life

, leading many novelties, connected regardless of miles more easily. Giving choices by internet is mundane, including enlarging our academic satisfaction, making our career from home, doing our shopping. Without gadgets our

life

is unimaginable because of its features.

For instance

, the significant number of people are working on internet

such

as social media marketing.

Thirdly

, economic progress imposes business facility of companies, by saying

this

we mean all well-known brands set up their business not just in local, as well as expand branches in various cities throughout the world.

Furthermore

, a range of services conveys what products and price we want to buy, importantly sales are able to meet demands in terms of price, quality, tastes. From my view, globalisation, high-level technology and economic development provide us lots of opportunities which lie in social, cultural, educational and professional

life

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societal expectations
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