Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. what problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

Nowadays more
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Nowadays, more
and more senior generation
tend
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tends
to be prevailing part of people living in rural
areas whereas
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areas, whereas
youngsters are largely moving to big cities. Though there might be justified reasons for
this
,
such
motion may cause several problems which will be discussed in my essay as well as possible solutions to overcome these issues.
To begin
with, it is important to understand why young people do not want to stay in their hometowns and choose big city life
instead
. One potential reason for
this
is that they believe
city
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the city
is the way to
better life
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a better life
better lives
. It is commonly the truth, that
finances
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the finances
of
aerarium
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the aerodrome
aerodrome
an aerodrome
is devoted not evenly.
Government
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The government
pays more attention and investment in amendment of capital and big cities.
Such
improvement positively affects not only living standards, but education quality and
further
career step up opportunity of urban areas while rural remain apart. From psychological part of view, it is
naturally
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natural
for people to find the best option for the future though
such
resettlement has some negative consequences. It
increases
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increased
has increased
already existing competition between
people which
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people, which
is
then
not a hole some competition, but a survival.
The good
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The best
example presenting
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example, presenting
the situation would be educational establishments which accept
certain number
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a certain number
of students every year. At the same time the number of students pretending on one seat increases
accordingly
to the growth of number of students applied. If a student from
rural area
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a rural area
rural areas
would be accepted, other precedents will lose their chance to study, yet that student could continue his education in his hometown whereas his urban competitors won’t. Additional to
this
, moving from countryside to town strips the growth of rural areas. As well denuding
countryside
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the countryside
qualified specialists, and youngsters representing the future generation, there is no development not only these
places but
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places, but
the state which is considered as a whole system. So, there cannot be any development if all strength is agglomerated unequally and punctually only in big cities. Despite all negative effects above
such
policy is very popular though the consequences may not be noticed momentously. It is better to take charge of
this
and change the situation. The best and only way
though
by means of; with aid of; through the act or agency of; "destroyed by fire"
through
which tackles the problem completely would be efficient government actions. If finances, which is
improvement today’s
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improvement, today’s
leading engine, would be divided evenly or according to demand to hold
areas whether
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areas, whether
rural or urban on the same level, so young people from
countryside
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the countryside
could receive same quality education as youngsters living in cities, there won’t be rural-to-urban motion towards
better life
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a better life
better lives
. To sum up, though there are strong reasons for young people moving from their hometowns, mostly bushes, the situation can be taken in hand and improved.
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