In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people nad give your opinion.

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In many nations around the
world people
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world, people
advocate that young people take a
gap
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year
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in order to
work
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travel
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between high school and varsity
education
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. From my perspective,
youngster
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the youngster
youngsters
should
travel
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or
work
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before commencing their college
education
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because it will help them to learn
different aspect
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different aspects
a different aspect
of life at
young age
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a young age
the young age
.
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, sometimes
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situation has both merits as well as demerits which I would discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. There are two major benefits of travelling and working
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in
adolescent before embarking their university
education
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. The
first
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and foremost is travelling expand their mental horizon When
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a student
the student
goes overseas or step out from their comfort zone, they can get different experiences by interacting with people with different mindset, attitudes and cultures.
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,
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period
also
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helps them to get an idea about the society.
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, they will gain deeper and better understanding of the world and community and it will help them to become a responsible person and they came to know about how community system
work
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.
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, doing
work
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before starting university
education
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help youngsters to feel independent and it will help them to understand the value
money
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because they will realize the hard
work
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involve in earning
money
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Hence due
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Hence, due
this
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, before purchasing anything they have
desire
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a desire
the desire
they must think and it make them less impulsive to their spending. When adolescent get to manage their personal finances, they will
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learn the importance of
money
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.
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to
this
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they feel motivated to face future challenges by having
first
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hand experiences in handling complex problem and situation at
work
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.
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, it would help
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with
in
the overall development of youngsters. Even though taking a
gap
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year
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to
work
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or
travel
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before beginning tertiary
education
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has some merits which I had discussed, in the above paragraphs while it
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has some notable drawback which is worth considering. The prime disadvantage of travelling it would cause people homesick because many young people not have been apart from their loved ones before that so when they
travel
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, they missed them.
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, in some extreme circumstances they may suffer from depression. Eventually,
this
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could lead to deterioration of both physical and mental health.
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this
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, sometime student who
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work
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works
may not come back to their study. The reason behind may that they enjoy earning
money
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or become
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money
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a money
minded and want to become
financial
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financially
independent.
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, their whole future negatively affected because without
degree
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a degree
and proper
education
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it is extremely difficult to acquire a job in
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competitive world. As we all know that Without
education
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a man is handicapped. In conclusion, taking a
year
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gap
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before tertiary
education
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has some props
a like
having the same or similar characteristics
alike
came to know about
appreciate
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appreciating
value
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the value
of
money
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and personality development.
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, it
also
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has some obvious drawback which have been exemplified in the above paragraph. All in all, it is up to
individuals
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individual
individual's
individuals'
choice to take a
year
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gap
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between higher and university
education
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but one should must consider their drawback.
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