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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? what can done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Regardless, people have some primary need, eating, sleeping, safe area etc. But in
this
 age some countries are
living
the act of departing
leaving
 on good circumstance, some countries are living opposite situation. It depends on the economic and political relationship. Agriculture has been developed, but many people still go hungry around the world. The reason comes from capitalism. In my sincere view, capitalism means whose are the strong government, their opinion, we can own all things from poor countries.
For instance
, Indıa and USA. Indian agriculture had been developing, but
this
 country has a poor economy because India has been exploited by dominion.
However
, Capitalism is a huge problem to all
world
Suggestion
worlds
.
Additionally
, people should help to hungry society. Nobody can choose their nation and family so
firstly
 we must understand it and after some associations may improve social solidarity project.
For example
, one girl from Turkey, she establishes one project for African children. People can send ice cream, meal etc. For special day. I sent to ice cream for my father's birthday and that children take a photo to my father. In my opinion, it is a nice project. Briefly, some countries has fair chance for agriculture, but in
this
 country people still go hungry because of the capitalism. Capitalism is the ancient and widespread problem, it is a political problem.We are
living
the act of departing
leaving
 some world, but we have not similar options.
Thus
, we have to go improve our conscious awareness to help others. Maybe we cannot stop to Capitalism but we can share our possibility.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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