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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is argued by some people that the gallery art the major education for a child when they are schooling in the present, while others believe that generation wasting for a kid when they are learning at school.
This
 essay will discuss why art is important for learner and some personally think
that is
 wasting time.
First
 of all, most institutions provide an arts accountable for students and it is compulsory that the learner must follow.
Although
, some students do not want to be a participate of
this
 period moment at the meantimes while they are in the class.
This
 conditional is performing of their ability, Skills, and their imagination about what they think. In nowadays, the development of technology had shown that anything and how is people think about their life. Fro example, when I was studying in secondary school. Arts sensitive is the one that we have to draw on the paper based and all coaches they might compared and give us feedback to improve as skill.
However
, some parents believe that, children might wasted point and it is more drawback than benefits. It is true, if their kids are concentrating on the major that could be profit to their lives in the future. Despite having positive development for students that who are interested to illustrate their dreams. Some students have to follow by their parents who are needing them to learn in the schooling periods by
additionally
.
Such
 as, Matt, who is my nephew, His father need him to be a lawyer in his future. Spite of he want to be a part of the musician. To conclude, in my honest opinion. In the meantimes most of children learn about the art is individually beneficial to person who are enjoying their dreams.
By contrast
, that some adult disagree, in which campus provides for their children for relaxing their mind from stressed. From the point of my view, I strongly disagree with the opinion that think wasted occasion for arts susceptible in school.
Submitted by Chaiyapat Soka on

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