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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreighn language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #foreighn #language
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 who lives in a country which is located abroad of his Homeland can
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 some difficulties,
due to
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a lack
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 of understanding
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of language
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 of the society. I partially disagree with
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i
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I
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 shall put forth my argument to support my point of view.
Thete
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There
These
are
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 several reasons why
i
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 choose
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life abroad.
Firstly
, almost
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forty
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per cent
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 of
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humanity think that without any skills of
speeking
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speaking
 in
a
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foreighn
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foreign
 languages, they cannot keep living in the international Republics.
However
, to put it simply
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 know a woman who
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has lived
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 in Argentina
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for approximetaly
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approximetaly
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approximately
 a year,
while
 she departed Tashkent she
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did
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 not know anything about tongues. In spite of
this
, a few times later the alien of
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Argentina talked calmly
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in
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this
 language. There are lots of people who are not able to learn a
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foreign
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 studying. In fact, that the complications of
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life, study us to be correct. I mean, residing farther than Motherland
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 serious issues , but it
teachs
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teaches
 us to solve problems ourselves we get used to self-care .
Moreover
, there is the best thing which will appreciate everyone is the gestures. Gesture is the visual signals which
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 to an onlooker. Every nation has
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 comprehension of movement.
For example
, a hand purse gesture
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 carries various meanings in different countries. In
France
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France,
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 it means «
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I
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 am afraid», but in
America
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culture
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culture,
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 it has no clear meaning.
To sum up
,
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 prefer to inhabit and be aware
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lot of
about
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other countries which
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 horizons and the gift of
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the tongue
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 rather than lead a sedentary
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lifestyle
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 which on
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contrary that
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 serious problems.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Language barrier
  • Miscommunication
  • Isolation
  • Cultural differences
  • Social norms
  • Essential services
  • Employment challenges
  • Social integration
  • Community events
  • Support systems
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