Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As is very well-known, rich countries often take the initiative to donate
money
to poorer countries as help or for return of benefit at a later time when they might require it. But often
this
falls short of what's actually required to improve the state of things in the poorer nations. They do more than often require the
money
provided to them, but what
the richer
Suggestion
the rich
nations fail to realize is that the poorer nations need a revamp of their education systems at
first
to improve the overall thinking skills and problem solving. Education can lead to long-term solvency as they are able to catch up with the actual skills required in today's workforce. Technology plays a big part in society today, and consumerism has shifted greatly towards it. Once the physiological and familial needs of the human are met, all we really need is what we, as a blanket term, call "entertainment". Since technology has revolutionized the workplace as well as entertainment, it is imperative that the richer countries provide
technological
Suggestion
technology
access and training to the poorer nations. While
money
can solve a nation's short-term problems, it'll deplete some time or the other if the poorer nation doesn't do anything with it other than paying for their food and lodging with it. Corruption is inevitable in most governments, especially those that of poorer nations,
thus
the donated
money
are not even completely used for social services properly, including but not limited to electricity, food, agriculture, education. Rich countries should rather lend out loans,
thus
making the country at least pay it back in the future since liquidity cannot be fixed with monetary donations. As for philanthropy, donating machinery and establishing their business operations there along with providing proper training can
also
help raise the standards of the workforce of the nation, bringing them up to par with the competitive world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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