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Using social media as Facebook, Twitter is replacing face-to-communication in this century. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In our modern life the development of technology is rapidly increasing. One of them is social media sites
such
 as Facebook, Twitter which is integral part of communication. While I argue that
this
 development has both benefits and drawbacks and I believe that there are more advantages than
disadavanages
. On the one hand, some people think that using social networking sites has negative impacts on people around the world.
First
 of all, the majority of people tend to contact each other on social networking sites and reduced face-to-face meetings.
For example
, nowadays, each individual possesses their own cell phone or laptop and they always keep in touch with their family members or friends on the internet.
Second
 of all, social networking sites have become popular among the youngsters who spend an excessive amount of time on web surfing and become depressed and isolated from their family.
On the other hand
, some people feel that there are lots of benefits using social networking sites.
First
, people can connect and communicate each others very easily, especially people who live far away. Because they exchange any kind of information in a few seconds.
For example
, when I was in Samarkand, which is far away from my hometown. I was able to sent all my pictures to my parents and chatting on Facebook more easily.
In addition
, it might be said that, social networking sites
such
 as Facebook, YouTube, etc.
would
Suggestion
Would
 definitely useful to young students.
For instance
, in a lockdown period anyone could not to go universities, colleges, schools and other educational areas. At that time, students could get a lot of knowledge from networking sites. In conclusion,
although
 it has some negative effects, I believe that advantages of social networking sites bring tons of positive impacts to our modern life.
Submitted by Ibrokhim Makhmudov on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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